Sacrifice feast of Eid Al-Adha
l1. Plan your paragraph about how your
family celebrates a certain holiday.
a.
What’s your main topics? write it
here.
Sacrifice feast of Eid Al-Adha spent with some of activities
b.
What are your subtopics? Write them
on the lines below.
1.) Pray together
2.) Meet people around for asking forgiveness
3.) Eat breakfast with special menu together
4.) See the animal Sacrifice
5.) Read Quran together
2. Now write a paragraph, underline the
topic sentence.
3. After write your paragraph, outline
it which parts are topic sentences, which major supporting sentences, and which
minor supporting sentences.
Addition :
Bold type is topic sentence
Orange text backgroud color are major supporting sentences.
Orange type color are minor supporting sentences.
Blue type color is the conclusion sentence.
One of the great day in Islam that Muslim celebrate
every year is Eid Al- Adha. Eid Al- Adha or we can call it with Sacrifice feast
is a religious holiday that lasts four days and takes place about seventy days
after the end of Ramadhan. During these festivities, animals are sacrificed,
food and money are donated to the poor and people take time out to celebrate it
with some ways in this national holiday.
For this special day of Eid Al-Adha, there are always several
activities that my family do during that glorious moment this year. It started with Eid Al-Adha prayer, we gathered in a
mosque at 6 PM. In this prayer, we were
not only doing shalat, but also heard the speech from Imam before started to
pray. Next, after shalat we went home and during
the trip, we use that time to meet people around. Usually it becomes moment for saying the
greetings in this glorious day and also asking forgiveness for every mistakes. After that, when we reached home it was time for my
family to gather and eat together for breakfast time.
There is also special food at that day, such as “Ketupat” and “Opor
Ayam” that my mom cooked for us. Then, after we had
special breakfast, usually me, my sister and my friends go to a field to see the
sacrificed of Animals. We helped our neighbor to slice the beef and
distribute it. it really builds our togetherness. Finally,
every Eid Al-Adha night is the most important one for us to read Quran together.
Usually, it starts after Maghrib until Isya prayer. Oh ya, as usual my father
always use this moment to tell us again about the Prophet Abraham's story to
make us always be grateful and more be grateful. Finally, that all activities
that my family did during Eid Al-Adha this year which spent with lot of nice
activities.
After Revising
After Revising
i really like the moment. thats cool. your article is easy to understand and your structure is very well and also you explain about subtopics, the major sentence and something like that. so keep writing.
BalasHapusHi Bayu ! Thanks for leaving your footprint here by a nice comment.
HapusHello meta,
BalasHapusI like your paragraph. It is simple and easy for me to understand the flow. I can see clearly the major and minor sentences in this paragraph, your colored sentences and your highlight is really helpful. But, I want to suggest something. I think you use the word "Finally" to times that actually there are many words that can replace it and become more variation. But overall, That is great! Keep improve and keep writing!:D
Regards,
Nur Intan K.
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Hapusyah, you are right Intan, but at that time i just want to use it hehe because i rare to find it in my paragraph :D
hey Meta.
BalasHapusI have read your paragraph and I personally think that it is very good because I can understand it clearly. I just have a suggestion. in the last 2 sentence, you should change "it starts" become "it started" because you are telling the past.
keep writing!!
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Hapushmmm actually there is "usually" before that words.. so i put present tense because it seems like habit and always continue every year until now.
Hi, Meta, I like your essay very much , and the structure is very clear. But there is a mistake in your paragraph." Then, after we had special breakfast, usually me, my sister and my friends go to a field to see the sacrificed of Animals" in my opinion, you can change "go" to "went". Fighting. Hu Minghui
BalasHapusHi Hanna! Thanks for leaving your footprint here by a constructive comment!
Hapusactually there is "Usually" before that words.. so i put present tense because it seems like habit and always continue every year...
Bonjour meta Je veut éxprimer ce que t'as écrit .Ce que j'avais remarqué que tu as décrit les choses telles qu'elles sont et tu les éxpriment avec un sentiment d'amour et de bonheur comme si vous étiez fiêre de cela avec une interprétation approffondie de toutes les étapes et les détailles et ceci s'adresse au grand public même ceux qui ne connaissent pas eid al edha qui est chére et sacrée pour la nation islamique et d'autre partie tu montre vos traditions et coutumes lors de cette occasion . C'est ce que j'ai ressenti et touché par cette article comme si je vivais vraiment cette atmosphére alors qu'ils convergent tant pour se transférer dans mon pays en tunisie . Et pourtant il fût un mois qui c'est passé . So meta this is not a throw of roses as say , but i say thank you to those who work and work hard . Terimakasih , assalamualaikom
BalasHapusWaalaikumsalam Abdel, Thanks for leaving your footprint here by a nice comment!
HapusActually it is a assignment to write how my family usually do to celebrate a certain holiday. so, i chose this Eid Al -Adha celebration. so, ya, this all what i have written told about the tradition and islamic atmosphere.
also, thanks for read this and maybe you can tell me what tradition in your country during Eld Al-Adha :)
mille fois merci.
Hello meta Tradition eid al edha in tunisia: Eid al-adha has a special flavor and is different from the rest of the days before and during eid. The families prepare répare and buy all the supplies they will have to prepare the cooking disches for this feast and what follows. So the night of the eid begins eid prayer and then the families start slaughtering their sacrifices and after complition of this is preparing the food in the présence of the whole family. Each région has its own characteristics but keep the same customs and tradition so it is appropriante if it is suittable for the meeting and exchange congratulations between families and friends and that is réunited and convergence of families and friends to each other is an occasion absent all hatred and self-love . Absolutly do not forget on this occasion all needy and vulnérable to donate a portion of the sacrifice or what you have to them as well as we do ,also not forget the joy of children for the préparation of the sweets of their own atmosphère . Of course all this is in a spirituality to pray and pray to god. Finaly i hope meta that i all said about this for you. Merci et á bientôt meta/ assalamualaikom
BalasHapusWaalaikumsalam abdel, wah thats really nice.
HapusHmm it seems same here, also.
The important one, eid can bring us more closer to family and God:)
Thanks for your sharing about eid al-Adha story in ur country, abdel, Interesting!
Hello meta Thank you for your point view regarding my article . á bientôt
HapusHi meta, thats really nice story about your islamic festival..
BalasHapusI can feel it is really nice.. And cant wait for your next post.. Keep writing meta!
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HapusThis is really warm story, when a family gather to celebrate a certain holiday.
BalasHapusI like the way you underlined your paragraph. It makes the reader easier to find some of major supporting sentences, minor, topic, and other things.
I didnt found any mistakes, so far.. This is really good meta
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HapusHello meta! I found that your paragraph is being structured well..
BalasHapusu also have a nice conclusing sentence.
Then, it is really nice to gather with family . actually, holiday is really glorius day for it..
Cant wait for your next post metakuuu
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HapusIt is really good paragraph , meta
BalasHapusU have topic sentence, major sentence, minor sentence
And you also conclude it well
Next, just do care about putting comma and dot in right way.
Keep posting meta!
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Hapus