Trois Chênes (All things that I do to kick the parasites from my Oaks)
If the life is like a plant, my life will be like
these three Oaks. They grow, breathe, and interact with each others. But, as what
a quote said “We can’t see a rainbow without the little rain”, my oaks
need protection to kick the parasites, my life needs something that can gives
me motivation to face the demotivation. It contained three things that I like
to kick my parasites. First,
I like reading. Actually, I
don’t have special genre of books that I like. But, most of books that I read
is more about ‘travelling novels’. Interestingly, when you read, you
can free your imagination dance with the whole things about story that you read.
For the example, when I read a novel about ‘world travelling books’ then
I can imagine I was there in that place and walked around the world. It
is really fun to read and relaxing me enough. The
second thing is writing. It maybe started when I read my favourite book for
the first time “Edensor” that showed me really brilliant organized words by
Andrea Hirata. It is really interesting for me, we can describe undescribed
words through paper, because In
writing, you are the only one who can decides what will happen in your paper. The third is listening to music. Mostly I like to listen some Turkish
and Middle east songs because of their unique instrument and most of their
lyrics are to make us always remember God, our creator. When you remember God, you will
easily forget about the pain. On the other hand, a research from university
of Maryland School of Medicine in 2008 said when you listen your favourite song
for 30 minutes it makes your endorphin[2] reacted. So, it is really
beneficial for me to hear my favourite song when I feel boring. In conclusion,
reading, writing, and listening to music are some things that I like to do to
kick the parasites from my Oaks.
How about your Oaks? What you like to do to kick your
parasites? Feel free to comment ! ! !
Thanks ^^
Notes :
[1] Trois Chênes is a french language
means the three Oaks.
[2] Endorphin
is a substance that produced in the brain and anterior pituitary to make us
feel happy and inhibits pain perception.
After editing :
After editing :
hello Meta. I just want to give you a suggestion regarding to your writing
BalasHapus- when you write a sentence, do not start it with "but".
- "For the example" you can just change it simply become "For example"
I personally think your overall writing is good because you have pointed out many important things.
Keep writing Meta!!
Hi Vira!!! Thanks for leaving your footprint here by a constructive comment.
HapusYah, you are right.. using a conjunction words to start a sentence is little weird and wrong. so, thanks for let me aware:))
Hello Meta, glad to see your paragraph, I think your paragraph was being structured well. Easily for me to understand your main topic. It because you underlined each of your topic. Also easily for me to see the relation between a major and minor of the sentences.
BalasHapusI just want a hive little bit suggestion in this sentences " then I can imagine I was there in that place and walked around the world." To become " then I could imagine I was there in that place and walked around the world."
Thank you ^_^
Hi Yosh!!! Thanks for leaving your footprint here by a constructive comment.
Hapusoh yap, you are right yosh... sorry my bad to type it wrongly, and thanks for let me aware :))
Hello meta,
BalasHapusI really like your paragraph, you make it in order and use some quotes. Just a little suggestion, you have to put your attention on punctuation mark. Don't put comma after but and so on. Thank you
Keep it up :)
Hi Nadaa!!! Thanks for leaving your footprint here by a nice comment.
Hapusoh yes i need to improve my writing skills more, thanks to let me aware :)
actually i only wrote 1 quote hehehe
Wowwwww.. overall I like this essay, especially your metaphor... it was interested... good job...!!!!
BalasHapusHi Evan!!! Thanks for leaving your footprint here by a amazing comment :D
HapusVeey good, especially for reading a book, you need to keep it, because it will give you more knowledge you don't know
BalasHapusHi Dhani!!! Thanks for leaving your footprint here by a nice comment.
Hapusyes, i like reading and to read books is really beneficial for us, so we need to keep it :) InshaAllah I will keep it too^^
hai meta, your paragraph its really good and i like it, because there is a lot of quote that can motivate.
BalasHapusHi Bay!!! Thanks for leaving your footprint here by a nice comment.
Hapusnice to hear that you also like to read some quotes, and yes.. it will motivate us :)) and really beneficial.
Hi meta,
BalasHapusGreat work, I like your paragraph. You make it different with the figure of speech. I want to suggest you that I think it's better to use "mostly about" rather than "more about". Overall, Nice paragraph! Keep it up!^^
Hi Intan!!! Thanks for leaving your footprint here by a constructive comment.
Hapushmm okay intan i will learn more about it, especially to choose a word and complete it become nicer sentence :))thanks for let me aware
hello.Meta
BalasHapusI feel feel your mind in your actirle.
But i think there are some mistakes like"for thr example"If you change these mistakes,it will be better
Look forwaed to your next actirle.
Hi Kristal!!! Thanks for leaving your footprint here by a constructive comment:)
HapusHello,meta. I like to read your paragraph. And I think I could learn something from you. For example, you make notes at last. thank you
BalasHapusHi Abby!!! Thanks for leaving your footprint here by a nice comment:)
HapusHello meta,it is a good choice to expres 3 things in u life in what can be removed from them to straighten things and make then more confortable and feeling peaceful.Yes trees are life,give us strength,comfort,oxygen,we use it when the heat or rain,,we eat from the fruit ...So it is the lifeline.you looked at me this way,so u think of the conscience and this is the comfort and access to the willing.Pour moi je confirme et bon courage
BalasHapusBonjour Abdel!!! Thanks for leaving your footprint here by a nice comment.
Hapusyou are right abdel, do you know i decided to choose oak trees because they really meaningful. their leaves are unique, they have strong trunks, and their roots are usefull because can absorb 50 gallons water every day... so yah,, it is life.. we need to have what is uniqueness, be strong to face the problem, and be usefull to others :)
mille fois merci :)